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I thought end of ch 4 was a flashback to ch 1, but found out the cloths were different after checking. It was so out of place, overly dramatic, and totally unnecessary, like you said
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I thought end of ch 4 was a flashback to ch 1, but found out the cloths were different after checking. It was so out of place, overly dramatic, and totally unnecessary, like you said
Just overall, the storytelling is really messy and all over the place,
like for instance the end of the 4th chapter and it’s unnecessary jump to a dramatic flash forward In chapter 5. At first I was into the whole “ooh I wonder what happened l?? Why is there a fight” cuz I thought I would be a character building moment where he fights with the band members due to conflict of opinions and popularity arguments (that they did mention previously only to not bring it up again) and maybe seme having a whole “ik I have an image of a selfish guy but Im serious about both my man and my music” moment which leads to confession from uke
But instead we get that whole assault scene which had no value whatsoever to driving the plot, he could of simply confessed (as he was already going to), but instead we get a assault plot with a completely irrelevant character who has a dumb motive and only lasted a bit of a chapter.
Also character relationships in this story are so vague, they never really went into exactly what they’re relationship in the past was and why uke (semi)avoids the seme (did they become friends? Was concert the only interaction?). The story is cute and good for a quick read but all they really do is fuck, the chemistry isn’t really there and we don’t really see why or how uke falls in love in the first place.
I didn’t realise I had such so much to say lol.